Before:
The Endless Game
I used to be,
So broken,
So fearful,
So isolated.
I felt as though I was sinking,
So much deeper,
So much lower,
So much faster each day.
Everything I did as a wife,
Was wrong to him,
Was never good enough,
Was never enough,
He wanted more.
When he would lie,
It was as transparent as glass.
The sadness his unfaithfulness and abuse brought me,
Engulfed me, pulling me under,
Twisting,
Turning,
Spinning me around.
I left broken
After:
A New Beginning
I am strong now,
I stand on my own,
I got myself together
And created a life for my family.
I have three amazing kids,
Who shine as bright as the sun.
My love for them
Is as strong as Hercules.
I have a house
That I pay for on my own.
I have a job
That allows me to put food on the table
Years ago,
I thought I needed him,
To live,
To feel loved,
To be worth something
I realized that I don't
I am strong now
Reflection;
In my poem, I used personification (the sadness...), simile (is as strong as Hercules... as transparent as glass...), allusion (same as the simile for Hercules) and repetition. I thought I did an okay job on this, it's definitely something I could improve on because it has been years since I have written poetry, I used to do it every day. I feel like I needed a little more time and help on writing this, I feel like it isn't as strong as it should be and I'm disappointed with myself.
Good overall, a push would be to take your time on it and get it done with extra time to review it and read it over. A praise is that you did a nice job explaining her life and portraying what she thought.
ReplyDeletei think you did a good job on explaining the before and after part by using good language
ReplyDeletei think you did a good job on explaining the before and after part by using good language
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job with info, and showing emotion in the poem. Great job
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